The revised passage is less engaging writing than the original. (It was a really clever analogy.) But it’s clear, and for that I have Said to thank
LessWrong is, to me, not about building a community of people writing dry, technically correct essays on various topics. It is about actually become less wrong, both as individuals who learn from each other, and as a community. This means “other people reading your writing” is not optional.
In this case, I see an example of Said ignoring the tradeoff between engagement, and clarity of the argument. Engaging writing is good. It means people actually read the post, instead of bouncing off after two paragraphs.
As far as I am concerned, this analogy points to what I consider the ‘true reason’ behind Said’s ban.
Net positive effect due to Said causing local argument improvements in the author by commenting.
vs
Net negative effect due to less posts due to people worried about (e.g.) Said nit-picking a non-central point, arguing an actual flaw using blunt and inconsiderate language, or socially trapping the author in a long comment chain that gets further and further away from the post and into critiquing each other’s comments.
If the moderators think the chilling effect of Said on posts and comments is worse for {rationality/the site/a third thing}, a ban is the right decision. If they don’t, a mistake was made.
In all of the above I have attempted to phrase my views on Said’s ban in neutral language observing the tradeoffs involved, but my n=1 example is “I comment more now that I won’t have Said making me regret it, and my comments, while not perfect, are net positive at making the community less wrong, so the ban has made my experience much better.
You appear to be looking for a leader. Why don’t you pick yourself?