Hrm. “But” is better than “For.” I think “Now” might be better than either, but I’ve been staring at these lines for a while- thoughts?
I prefer “but”. To me, “now” doesn’t have the “compare-and-contrast” feeling, and does feel like it’s setting up for something that doesn’t come.
If I turn each verse into a single sentence, I get:
A Snaw thinks something is true, even if it’s really just a guess. [But/now] a scientist checks the things they believe. On a lake, a scientist’s boat crashed into a Snaw’s.
And the “now” makes me think that the third sentence will be more closely related than it actually is. In the actual poem, I guess the setup could be for the second half of the verse, but it feels like it needs more, or something.
Eh. I like “so the best off their work is the kind that’ll replicate” over “so the best of their work is what can replicate” but admit mine isn’t great.
Valid. In any case Richard’s is a clear improvement on both.
I prefer “but”. To me, “now” doesn’t have the “compare-and-contrast” feeling, and does feel like it’s setting up for something that doesn’t come.
If I turn each verse into a single sentence, I get:
A Snaw thinks something is true, even if it’s really just a guess. [But/now] a scientist checks the things they believe. On a lake, a scientist’s boat crashed into a Snaw’s.
And the “now” makes me think that the third sentence will be more closely related than it actually is. In the actual poem, I guess the setup could be for the second half of the verse, but it feels like it needs more, or something.
Valid. In any case Richard’s is a clear improvement on both.