This was the first piece of short-fiction I’ve written! I’m keen to hear feedback, especially from folks who’ve written lots of this style of short-fiction before (speculative, playing-around-with-the-format, etc). Thanks :)
At 2:38 in this video. The whole series is worth spending a few days watching while neglecting food or sleep, if your sense of humor is anything like mine.
It was good! I’m surprised to hear that this was your first piece of short fiction! As a writer I’m inexperienced, but as a reader I thought the dialogue felt pretty naturalistic and well-paced. And I too liked the bat’s tendency to interrupt Dwarkesh, lol
This was the first piece of short-fiction I’ve written! I’m keen to hear feedback, especially from folks who’ve written lots of this style of short-fiction before (speculative, playing-around-with-the-format, etc). Thanks :)
Good stuff! Loved the “upgrade your subscription” bit, it was like a funny version of SCP’s “data expunged”.
The first few lines were almost the Freeman’s Mind joke:
And the personality of the bat just interrupting Dwarkesh all the time was really nicely done, too.
Thanks!
What’s the Freeman’s Mind joke?
At 2:38 in this video. The whole series is worth spending a few days watching while neglecting food or sleep, if your sense of humor is anything like mine.
It was good! I’m surprised to hear that this was your first piece of short fiction! As a writer I’m inexperienced, but as a reader I thought the dialogue felt pretty naturalistic and well-paced. And I too liked the bat’s tendency to interrupt Dwarkesh, lol