It actually sat in my drafts pile for several months in exactly that form. I figured people wouldn’t get the (intended) point without explanation, but also adding the explanation felt kind of awkward.
It’s good either way :) I just think it’s poetic, and might “work its way in” in the way that good stories do on its own if readers give it time.
It actually sat in my drafts pile for several months in exactly that form. I figured people wouldn’t get the (intended) point without explanation, but also adding the explanation felt kind of awkward.
It’s good either way :) I just think it’s poetic, and might “work its way in” in the way that good stories do on its own if readers give it time.