The biggest flaw I find in the story when recommending it to other people is that Harry’s character can be very off-putting. Lot of people have told me that he seems to be right about everything and feels didactic. Knowing the full scope of the story we know that he does make a lot of mistakes, but they’re not spotlighted in the early chapters where people drop off. So a hypothetical rewritten version might benefit from having him be visibly wrong about something early on.
I think plane crash does a better job with this as Keltham is visibly wrong about important things from the beginning. Not just the things he’s being actively deceived on but also where he’s confidently wrong about things due to overestimating his own knowledge.
The biggest flaw I find in the story when recommending it to other people is that Harry’s character can be very off-putting. Lot of people have told me that he seems to be right about everything and feels didactic. Knowing the full scope of the story we know that he does make a lot of mistakes, but they’re not spotlighted in the early chapters where people drop off. So a hypothetical rewritten version might benefit from having him be visibly wrong about something early on.
I think plane crash does a better job with this as Keltham is visibly wrong about important things from the beginning. Not just the things he’s being actively deceived on but also where he’s confidently wrong about things due to overestimating his own knowledge.