This story would have benefited from being edited by a chess player. I think one of the better players in even a “medium-small town” with “a thriving chess club as one of its central civic institutions” would know more about the game than the author seems to. (The chess writing seemed off to me, and I am significantly worse than a serious club player.)
“I thought at first it was a mistake, for you to castle so early” is a weird thing for Humman to say. Castling early is standard default beginner advice. Even if there was some unusual feature of the opening that made it a bad choice in this game, you wouldn’t use the word “so” in that sentence.
It’s weird for Assi to describe Humman’s play as using “particular tactics”, and then to (insincerely) compliment him for “doing well at one-move lookahead” and not “unforcedly throwing away material right on your next move”. Tactics are short sequences of moves that work together to achieve a goal. (An example I keep falling for in bullet games with the Englund gambit accepted (1. d4 e5?! 2. dxe5) opening: Black’s dark-square bishop is on d6, White’s queen is still on d1, the d-file is open due to accepting the Englund gambit, and Black castles queenside to put a rook on d8. Black sacrifices the Bishop with Bh2+, revealing a discovered attack of the Black rook on the White queen, which White can’t do anything about because they have to use their move to deal with the check.) If a player is at the level of using “particular tactics”, an IM who wants to complement them for social reasons shouldn’t find it difficult (to the point of giving up after “a dozen seconds of” “twist[ing] his brain around”) to find something concrete and nice to say that’s less patronizing than “at least you’re not hanging pieces.”
(Also, the Ethiopean isn’t a real opening; a cutsey fake detail like that feels out of place mixed in with real details like IMs needing an Elo of 2400, and I’d expect a club player to have heard of simuls.)
Do these flaws matter, given that the story isn’t really about chess? I argue that it does matter, because a story that is about the folly of misperceiving how high skill ladders go should take basic care to get the details right concerning the skill ladder of its notional real-world example. (An earlier draft of this comment continued, “particularly in 2025 when basic care is so cheap. In the story, Tessa has no qualms about using LLMs to fill in domain knowledge gaps; why doesn’t Yudkowsky?”, but when I checked, Claude Sonnet 4.5 didn’t anticipate my criticism.)
The grandparent explains why Dai was confused about your authorial intent, and his comment at the top of the thread is sitting at 31 karma in 15 votes, suggesting that other readers found Dai’s engagement valuable. If that’s grossly negligent reading comprehension, then would you prefer to just not have readers? That is, it seems strange to be counting down from “smart commenters interpret my words in the way I want them to be interpreted” rather than up from “no one reads or comments on my work.”