I’m pleased to hear that you liked my characters. I’m new to writing and characterization is something I’m focused on improving.
You’re right, and I’m willing to own a certain amount of gender-bias. While I have no problem at all with woman having equal rights, I do on some level tend to see the world tinted with a “men hunt/gather and women nest” perspective.
I hadn’t noticed that come through in the story, though, until you pointed it out. Honestly, I think length played a large part in it.
As you noted, I don’t have a great deal of room to work with, as the point of Word Cereal is that it’s short fiction—something you could consume as regularly as, say, a webcomic.
Streamlining the system to move only men made it much easier to set the stage, though that’s a decision I’d made subconsciously when I wrote it, that I’m only seeing (and justifying) now.
Anyway, thanks for the kind words and insight :)
Hi All -
This is my first time posting a comment here @ Less Wrong.
I really liked both this post and Eliezer’s story ‘Three Worlds Collide’ - so much so that I’ve written my own weirdtopian story, ‘Round Robin’.
You can read it at the following link, if you’d like:
http://www.wordcereal.com/serial/?story=18
p.s. I apologize that this comment is kinda spammy—I’m posting it because I actually think you might be interested, not to drive traffic (but you’d just have to take my word on that :)