The following is a spoiler about the sci-fi story mentioned, so I’ve tagged it spoiler:
I think you should have taken more care handling the spoiler, since you mention the presence of a spoiler only after the quote, and even though you don’t mention the story’s name explicitly it’s obvious which story it is, even if you haven’t read it and only know about its existence. So I’d encourage a re-ordering, or more important changes.
The following is a spoiler about the sci-fi story mentioned, so I’ve tagged it spoiler:
I think you should have taken more care handling the spoiler, since you mention the presence of a spoiler only after the quote, and even though you don’t mention the story’s name explicitly it’s obvious which story it is, even if you haven’t read it and only know about its existence. So I’d encourage a re-ordering, or more important changes.