This is an extremely good point and I’ve strong upvoted. However, I’m not terribly impressed with the writing quality. Any chance you’d be willing to edit it further? I’d like to see more line breaks and fewer words per sentence, with focus on removing syntactic repetition. A more skilled editor may have better suggestions than me on how to do this well
Thank you very much for the positive feedback and upvote. I would certainly be willing to edit my post further. Admittedly, I wanted to condense the proposal into a ~5mins read and if people wanted more depth they could view my sources. However, this constraint may have made my writing become overly condensed and loose readability. I will think about your general feedback but I would also be happy to consider altering any specific elements you found to be the least legible.
I don’t think merely condensing points is the best way to make things easy to parse quickly anymore. Instead, I’d recommend focusing on visual layout—make different things different, similar things similar. Right now your post is a series of text blocks; to make it easy for someone not yet convinced of its value to read, intro with a summary, outro with a summary, titles of each section that follow the flow of the summary, each section explains the details. Pretty standard way for posts to work, I really only explain it to contrast it with some of the ways one might try to get too clever using summarizer AIs; though of course it’s definitely not trivial to create a good version of this layout, and I hardly blame you for just posting what you had, it’s not like my posts are even as good as this. don’t bend over backwards to do well—I describe the ideal version because it’s a target and I always aim for posts to be widely shareable. Informed minds can disagree on this sort of stuff.
About to sleep—I’ll read through properly tomorrow!
Thank you for the considered feedback, I will go through over it with an editor I know. Also, if you really like the idea please feel free to write your own post on, or inspired by, Augmented Assembly
This is an extremely good point and I’ve strong upvoted. However, I’m not terribly impressed with the writing quality. Any chance you’d be willing to edit it further? I’d like to see more line breaks and fewer words per sentence, with focus on removing syntactic repetition. A more skilled editor may have better suggestions than me on how to do this well
Thank you very much for the positive feedback and upvote. I would certainly be willing to edit my post further. Admittedly, I wanted to condense the proposal into a ~5mins read and if people wanted more depth they could view my sources. However, this constraint may have made my writing become overly condensed and loose readability. I will think about your general feedback but I would also be happy to consider altering any specific elements you found to be the least legible.
I don’t think merely condensing points is the best way to make things easy to parse quickly anymore. Instead, I’d recommend focusing on visual layout—make different things different, similar things similar. Right now your post is a series of text blocks; to make it easy for someone not yet convinced of its value to read, intro with a summary, outro with a summary, titles of each section that follow the flow of the summary, each section explains the details. Pretty standard way for posts to work, I really only explain it to contrast it with some of the ways one might try to get too clever using summarizer AIs; though of course it’s definitely not trivial to create a good version of this layout, and I hardly blame you for just posting what you had, it’s not like my posts are even as good as this. don’t bend over backwards to do well—I describe the ideal version because it’s a target and I always aim for posts to be widely shareable. Informed minds can disagree on this sort of stuff.
About to sleep—I’ll read through properly tomorrow!
Thank you for the considered feedback, I will go through over it with an editor I know. Also, if you really like the idea please feel free to write your own post on, or inspired by, Augmented Assembly