Post is very informal. It reads like, well, a personal blog post. A little in the direction of raw freewriting. It’s fluid. Easy to read and relate to.
That matters, when you’re trying to convey nuanced information about how minds work. Relatable means the reader is making connections with their personal experiences; one of the most powerful ways to check comprehension and increase retention. This post shows a subtle error as it appears from the inside. It doesn’t surprise me that this post sparked some rich discussion in the comments.
To be frank, I’d be very wary of trying to suggest edits. I don’t want this post to lose that feeling of unfiltered thought-to-page, when it’s a crucial element of its magic. Maybe I’d add some doodley illustrations to vividly supplement the textual imagery. I imagine it *could* get clearer benefit from light restructuring and expansions. The most authentic-*feeling* writing does not perfectly align with with the most *authentic* writing, after all.
(Maybe edit the bit at the end of “Relevant context” so the ironic ‘stands out’ better… It was perfectly clear from context that this was ironic, but it could have been clearer from ?structure?wording?. idk “yeah nopes” felt kind of weak as the turning point.)
What I would like to see: It’s a year later now. Write a postscript with updated thoughts since then. How has your model, and your use of it, evolved since you wrote this post? Does the basic practice of “sit with the fact that I’m feeling something, and hug the child that brought that emotion instead of slapping them” produce the same results for you it did at the start?
Also expand on the ‘related’. See if you can find specific posts and quotes to support the sentiment of safety as the biggest barrer to rational thinking/discourse. If you can collect and quotes some small anecdotes of other people’s experiences with needing or finding emotional safety to improve their thinking, I believe that would make it feel more… ?connected?. Increase safety not just by providing a skill but also generating a sense that ‘i am not alone in this’.
I have one niggling question: Is it actually true that most people have all the machinery to move their ears? I thought there was a piece missing or something in the median person....
Looking up the facts, it looks as though that whether conscious control can be taught is under contention but the function is all there.
Post is very informal. It reads like, well, a personal blog post. A little in the direction of raw freewriting. It’s fluid. Easy to read and relate to.
That matters, when you’re trying to convey nuanced information about how minds work. Relatable means the reader is making connections with their personal experiences; one of the most powerful ways to check comprehension and increase retention. This post shows a subtle error as it appears from the inside. It doesn’t surprise me that this post sparked some rich discussion in the comments.
To be frank, I’d be very wary of trying to suggest edits. I don’t want this post to lose that feeling of unfiltered thought-to-page, when it’s a crucial element of its magic. Maybe I’d add some doodley illustrations to vividly supplement the textual imagery. I imagine it *could* get clearer benefit from light restructuring and expansions. The most authentic-*feeling* writing does not perfectly align with with the most *authentic* writing, after all.
(Maybe edit the bit at the end of “Relevant context” so the ironic ‘stands out’ better… It was perfectly clear from context that this was ironic, but it could have been clearer from ?structure?wording?. idk “yeah nopes” felt kind of weak as the turning point.)
What I would like to see: It’s a year later now. Write a postscript with updated thoughts since then. How has your model, and your use of it, evolved since you wrote this post? Does the basic practice of “sit with the fact that I’m feeling something, and hug the child that brought that emotion instead of slapping them” produce the same results for you it did at the start?
Also expand on the ‘related’. See if you can find specific posts and quotes to support the sentiment of safety as the biggest barrer to rational thinking/discourse. If you can collect and quotes some small anecdotes of other people’s experiences with needing or finding emotional safety to improve their thinking, I believe that would make it feel more… ?connected?. Increase safety not just by providing a skill but also generating a sense that ‘i am not alone in this’.
I have one niggling question: Is it actually true that most people have all the machinery to move their ears? I thought there was a piece missing or something in the median person....
Looking up the facts, it looks as though that whether conscious control can be taught is under contention but the function is all there.