All of it. Then start over at the other end. Write the thrust of the article in one plain sentence. I don’t know what it is at the moment. Write it in bullet points. Write it in exactly 100 words. Never write a sentence when one word will do; never write one word when none will do. Think only about what truth you are trying to present, and why the reader should agree.
Also, while I don’t want to speculate about your life, it does read like an autobiographical ramble driven by unhappy memories. My personal reaction to it is just, “I don’t care about these people.”
I just don’t know what to delete...
All of it. Then start over at the other end. Write the thrust of the article in one plain sentence. I don’t know what it is at the moment. Write it in bullet points. Write it in exactly 100 words. Never write a sentence when one word will do; never write one word when none will do. Think only about what truth you are trying to present, and why the reader should agree.
Also, while I don’t want to speculate about your life, it does read like an autobiographical ramble driven by unhappy memories. My personal reaction to it is just, “I don’t care about these people.”