All of it. Then start over at the other end. Write the thrust of the article in one plain sentence. I don’t know what it is at the moment. Write it in bullet points. Write it in exactly 100 words. Never write a sentence when one word will do; never write one word when none will do. Think only about what truth you are trying to present, and why the reader should agree.
Also, while I don’t want to speculate about your life, it does read like an autobiographical ramble driven by unhappy memories. My personal reaction to it is just, “I don’t care about these people.”
All of it. Then start over at the other end. Write the thrust of the article in one plain sentence. I don’t know what it is at the moment. Write it in bullet points. Write it in exactly 100 words. Never write a sentence when one word will do; never write one word when none will do. Think only about what truth you are trying to present, and why the reader should agree.
Also, while I don’t want to speculate about your life, it does read like an autobiographical ramble driven by unhappy memories. My personal reaction to it is just, “I don’t care about these people.”