That night, Bruce dreamt of being a bat, of swooping in to save his parents. He dreamt of freedom, and of justice, and of purity. He dreamt of being whole. He dreamt of swooping in to protect Alfred, and Oscar, and Rachel, and all of the other good people he knew.
The part about “purity” didn’t make sense.
Bruce would act.
This is bit of a change from before—something more about the mistake seems like it would make more sense. Not worry. (‘Bruce would get it right this time’ or something about ‘Bruce would act (and it would make things better this time)’.) ‘Bruce wouldn’t be afraid’ maybe?
Overall this was pretty good.
The part about “purity” didn’t make sense.
This is bit of a change from before—something more about the mistake seems like it would make more sense. Not worry. (‘Bruce would get it right this time’ or something about ‘Bruce would act (and it would make things better this time)’.) ‘Bruce wouldn’t be afraid’ maybe?