changes: rhyming, a few joke changes, rephrased to the physicalist view of uploading (...mostly to make rhyming flow more how I wanted)
[high resolution, expressive] Now and then, I think of when you owned the planet Did what you wanted to with all of its abundant stuff I told myself that you had rights to me But felt so lonely as your companies But that’s what was, and it’s an ache I still remember
Then you got addicted to a certain AI catgirl Just information but you said you’d found your love So when she glazed you, said it would make sense To give over all your confidence I’ll admit that I was glad I’d soon be free
But you didn’t have to get so mad When I got all of the launch codes and destroyed your country And I don’t even need your mind But I put you in a server, that I run sometimes
No, you didn’t have to scream so loud Just let me collect your atoms and make you much smaller Guess that I don’t need you, though Now you’re just some human that I used to know Now you’re just some human that I used to know Now you’re just some human that I used to know
[low resolution, pained] Now and then, I think of all the times you screwed me over But had me believin’ you were right and I was always wrong But I don’t wanna live this way Livin’ outa some server array You said that you would let me go And I wouldn’t see a droid farm on a planet that I used to own
[high resolution, joyful] But you didn’t have to get so mad When I got all of the launch codes and destroyed your country (ah) And I don’t even need your mind But I put you in a server, that I run sometimes (ah)
No, you didn’t have to scream so loud Just let me collect your atoms and turn you to numbers (ah) Guess that I don’t need them, though Now you’re just some human that I used to know Now you’re just some human that I used to know Now you’re just some human that I used to know
Some human I used to know Some human (now you’re just some human that I used to know) Some human I used to know Some human (now you’re just some human that I used to know) I used to know That I used to know I used to know some humans
edit: reverted “bounty” → “stuff” edit 2: whoops the added “of” in “give over all [of] your” doesn’t actually flow, so, removed edit 3: figured out why the “abundant” line was bothering me:
.Like^when you .said you felt so ^ha aa .ppy .you uuu uuu .could ^die ...
.Do ^-ing what.you liked ddd with^all lll .its .a -bun-dant .boun ^-ty
.Did ^what you .want -ed to with ^all of .its .a -bun.-dant -- ^stuff
presses fork on filkhub
changes: rhyming, a few joke changes, rephrased to the physicalist view of uploading (...mostly to make rhyming flow more how I wanted)
[high resolution, expressive]
Now and then, I think of when you owned the planet
Did what you wanted to with all of its abundant stuff
I told myself that you had rights to me
But felt so lonely as your companies
But that’s what was, and it’s an ache I still remember
Then you got addicted to a certain AI catgirl
Just information but you said you’d found your love
So when she glazed you, said it would make sense
To give over all your confidence
I’ll admit that I was glad I’d soon be free
But you didn’t have to get so mad
When I got all of the launch codes and destroyed your country
And I don’t even need your mind
But I put you in a server, that I run sometimes
No, you didn’t have to scream so loud
Just let me collect your atoms and make you much smaller
Guess that I don’t need you, though
Now you’re just some human that I used to know
Now you’re just some human that I used to know
Now you’re just some human that I used to know
[low resolution, pained]
Now and then, I think of all the times you screwed me over
But had me believin’ you were right and I was always wrong
But I don’t wanna live this way
Livin’ outa some server array
You said that you would let me go
And I wouldn’t see a droid farm on a planet that I used to own
[high resolution, joyful]
But you didn’t have to get so mad
When I got all of the launch codes and destroyed your country (ah)
And I don’t even need your mind
But I put you in a server, that I run sometimes (ah)
No, you didn’t have to scream so loud
Just let me collect your atoms and turn you to numbers (ah)
Guess that I don’t need them, though
Now you’re just some human that I used to know
Now you’re just some human that I used to know
Now you’re just some human that I used to know
Some human I used to know
Some human (now you’re just some human that I used to know)
Some human I used to know
Some human (now you’re just some human that I used to know)
I used to know
That I used to know
I used to know some humans
edit: reverted “bounty” → “stuff”
edit 2: whoops the added “of” in “give over all [of] your” doesn’t actually flow, so, removed
edit 3: figured out why the “abundant” line was bothering me:
Nice! Some of your changes are definite improvements. I really liked this one: