This will be the subject of a future post, presuming this one is well-received.
I think your post would benefit from having “meta” or off-main-topic comments like this be put as footnotes rather than directly in the main text.
As for the article itself, it’s a bit hard to follow properly. The flow of communication seems somewhat broken and appears to jump from point to point, eventually covering the entire matter but in a less effective manner than if the core ideas and beliefs were more clearly separated from the explanation, inferences, comparisons, examples, and other supportive material. Not implying there should be a clean division into two parts, but rather that paragraphs and text formatting could be reworked into a more effective and convincing whole.
Other than that, I like the content so far and am looking forwards to reading more!
I think your post would benefit from having “meta” or off-main-topic comments like this be put as footnotes rather than directly in the main text.
As for the article itself, it’s a bit hard to follow properly. The flow of communication seems somewhat broken and appears to jump from point to point, eventually covering the entire matter but in a less effective manner than if the core ideas and beliefs were more clearly separated from the explanation, inferences, comparisons, examples, and other supportive material. Not implying there should be a clean division into two parts, but rather that paragraphs and text formatting could be reworked into a more effective and convincing whole.
Other than that, I like the content so far and am looking forwards to reading more!
Looks like I need to pull this back into my drafts and fiddle with it. Thank you for the feedback!