Hey, thanks for giving some ways to make the essay better!
Your points are good; I definitely could reduce the amount of implied/assumed knowledge I’m working with. I know about this, and I’m actively trying to do better on this front.
As for the bit about breaking promises, might it be a semantic issue / your situation being more unique? EX: I’ve talked to 2-3 friends about the moment of breaking promises happening, and they concurred that it seemed to be a good fit to their internal activities.
Hey, thanks for giving some ways to make the essay better!
Your points are good; I definitely could reduce the amount of implied/assumed knowledge I’m working with. I know about this, and I’m actively trying to do better on this front.
As for the bit about breaking promises, might it be a semantic issue / your situation being more unique? EX: I’ve talked to 2-3 friends about the moment of breaking promises happening, and they concurred that it seemed to be a good fit to their internal activities.