I think the disconnect might be what you want this article to be (a guide to baldness) vs what it is (the author’s journey and thoughts around baldness mixed with gallows humor regarding his potential fate) [...] That said, setting audience expectations is also an important part of writing, and I think “A Rationalist’s Guide to Male Pattern Baldness” is probably setting the wrong expectation.
Yeah, good point. I agree, I think this is the problem.
The Norword/forest comparison gets used consistently throughout (including the title) and is the only metaphor used this way. Whether you like this comparison or not, it’s not a case of AI injecting constant flowery language.
I disagree, there are other parts of the article, independent of that particular pun which I think are too floury and use too many & too mixed metaphors, but I don’t want to drag on this conversation & point out all the problems I personally have with the article. Very clearly others disagree with me, so my criticism seems likely not representative here.
Yeah, good point. I agree, I think this is the problem.
I disagree, there are other parts of the article, independent of that particular pun which I think are too floury and use too many & too mixed metaphors, but I don’t want to drag on this conversation & point out all the problems I personally have with the article. Very clearly others disagree with me, so my criticism seems likely not representative here.