Alright, so, as I understand your essay, your essay essentially comes in two parts.
Part one consists of the bulk of your essay, and describes in some detail why it is a bad idea to base your self-esteem on some concept of inherent purity or goodness. You argue it well, and you make several good points.
Part two, however, consists of only the last three vague paragraphs, and claims that you should rather base your self-esteem on your willingness to be rational. It does not state why. It looks like, having finished with part one, you were looking for something to base self-esteem on and just grabbed the first thing to come to mind. Why should I not rather base my self-esteem on the number of socks that I own, or on the size of my house, or on the number of scientific papers that I write?
In effect, you’re saying “A is incorrect therefore Q”, while failing to even consider options B, C, D, etc.
Alright, so, as I understand your essay, your essay essentially comes in two parts.
Part one consists of the bulk of your essay, and describes in some detail why it is a bad idea to base your self-esteem on some concept of inherent purity or goodness. You argue it well, and you make several good points.
Part two, however, consists of only the last three vague paragraphs, and claims that you should rather base your self-esteem on your willingness to be rational. It does not state why. It looks like, having finished with part one, you were looking for something to base self-esteem on and just grabbed the first thing to come to mind. Why should I not rather base my self-esteem on the number of socks that I own, or on the size of my house, or on the number of scientific papers that I write?
In effect, you’re saying “A is incorrect therefore Q”, while failing to even consider options B, C, D, etc.