With request to the Boulder Valley School District Science Content Standards, Nederland Middle Senior High School is highly motivated to reform their Science Department.
respect, regard, or reference.
Teachers will attend training sessions to become proficient with the technology and learn ho to integrate this technology into their classroom.
how
In order to meet the Science Content Standards set forth by Boulder Valley School District, our Science Department requires hardware. software, training and curriculum.
hardware, software
With a Microcomputer Based Laboratory (MBL) students can perform sophisticated experiments, collect and manipulate data, share their findings with classmates and do in depth analysis of natural phenomena.
in–depth
Productivity in the laboratory will be increased due to computers performing the data manipulation, enabling students more time to concentrate on scientific principals and concepts.
principles
With a more hands-on approach to science, many students who lose interest in science past the graduation requirements could find science to be more relevant to their day to day lives.
day–to–day
This science lab will be in place alter the grant period is over.
after
Team Labs will receive $30,175 for science curriculum, software and probeware. In addition, they will receive $2.250 for teacher training.
$2,250
Consistently ‘moneys’ is used where ‘money’ or ‘monies’ seems correct to me; I did not count this as an error despite not following a strict style guide. Most other ‘errors’ are very reasonably scanning errors rather than writing errors; the only error that couldn’t plausibly be a scanner error would be ‘principal’ for ‘principle’.
Overall, the writing was simplistic, sentences were short and simple, and would pass a technical writing test. Presented as a model for what complexity and intelligence level of grants are approved, that is very informative. Grant proposals (apparently) should be simple, repetitive, and full of Capitalized Buzzwords that are Important to the Right People.
I actually counted the really short sentences heavily against them mentally, probably too much. Owing to the way I parse sentences, reading the grant was like listening to William Shatner at his… not quite hammiest, but pretty close.
An alternative explanation is offered here: http://lesswrong.com/lw/h5z/problems_in_education/8qqj (Specifically, that the document may have been electronically scanned; this could also account for other apparent spelling mistakes. Handwriting recognition is getting better, but is still far from perfect.)
Quotes from the .pdf, with my corrections:
respect, regard, or reference.
how
hardware, software
in–depth
principles
day–to–day
after
$2,250
Consistently ‘moneys’ is used where ‘money’ or ‘monies’ seems correct to me; I did not count this as an error despite not following a strict style guide. Most other ‘errors’ are very reasonably scanning errors rather than writing errors; the only error that couldn’t plausibly be a scanner error would be ‘principal’ for ‘principle’.
Overall, the writing was simplistic, sentences were short and simple, and would pass a technical writing test. Presented as a model for what complexity and intelligence level of grants are approved, that is very informative. Grant proposals (apparently) should be simple, repetitive, and full of Capitalized Buzzwords that are Important to the Right People.
I actually counted the really short sentences heavily against them mentally, probably too much. Owing to the way I parse sentences, reading the grant was like listening to William Shatner at his… not quite hammiest, but pretty close.
As far as the 2.250 thing, that’s actually not that uncommon outside English-speaking nations; see http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Decimal_point#Countries_using_Arabic_numerals_with_decimal_comma which lists countries which use decimals as thousands separators and commas as decimal marks. (That may actually help to explain the short sentences, come to think of it.)
An alternative explanation is offered here: http://lesswrong.com/lw/h5z/problems_in_education/8qqj (Specifically, that the document may have been electronically scanned; this could also account for other apparent spelling mistakes. Handwriting recognition is getting better, but is still far from perfect.)