Just as the supernatural is a non-explanation of unexplained phenomena, superstition is a non-explanation of causal relationships; it is the recognition of them, without the attribution of cause.
not sure if it’s the syllables; or the word length (or word use) or the switch between negatives and non-negatives; but this sentence was hard to read.
Try this:
Just as the idea of “supernatural” is not an explanation of mysterious phenomena, superstition is not an explanation of causal relationships; it is a recognition of a relationship; without trying to name the cause.
(not sure if it’s better)
I enjoyed the read once I made sure to read it carefully a second time.
I found some of this hard to parse;
not sure if it’s the syllables; or the word length (or word use) or the switch between negatives and non-negatives; but this sentence was hard to read.
Try this:
(not sure if it’s better)
I enjoyed the read once I made sure to read it carefully a second time.
Adjusting! Thank you.
ETA: Corrected some related issues with poor phrasing, particularly implications I didn’t intend to imply.