I’m not entirely sure who the audience of this letter is (I’m given to understand “effective altruists” is a pretty heterogeneous group). This affects how your letter should look so much that I can’t give much object-level feedback. For instance, it matters how much of your audience has pre-existing familiarity with things like raising the sanity waterline and rationality as a common interest across causes; if most of them lack this familiarity, I expect they’ll read your first sentence, be unable to bridge an inferential gap, and stop reading.
Ideally, I’d like to know how exactly this letter is getting to its recipients: are you posting on EA forum or mailing it to anyone who’s donated to GiveWell?
The letter would be passed to people involved in the EA movement interested in knowing about Intentional Insights and our efforts to spread rationality, so they would be heterogeneous but more rationality-oriented than most. But I think you’re right about the inferential gap, I’ll need to work on rewording that section, thank you!
I’m not entirely sure who the audience of this letter is (I’m given to understand “effective altruists” is a pretty heterogeneous group). This affects how your letter should look so much that I can’t give much object-level feedback. For instance, it matters how much of your audience has pre-existing familiarity with things like raising the sanity waterline and rationality as a common interest across causes; if most of them lack this familiarity, I expect they’ll read your first sentence, be unable to bridge an inferential gap, and stop reading.
Ideally, I’d like to know how exactly this letter is getting to its recipients: are you posting on EA forum or mailing it to anyone who’s donated to GiveWell?
The letter would be passed to people involved in the EA movement interested in knowing about Intentional Insights and our efforts to spread rationality, so they would be heterogeneous but more rationality-oriented than most. But I think you’re right about the inferential gap, I’ll need to work on rewording that section, thank you!