Part of it is that she sounds extremely serious, but mostly looks like a fun loving person
just fooling around. This clash makes her seem less believable to me (fun loving people
can be serious and serious people can have fun, but usually not both at the same time,
at least to this degree),
Hunh. I guess it’s true what they say—truth can be stranger than fiction, because fiction has to be plausible. Those parts of the narrator character are fairly closely based on me… so I guess if I want her to seem more believable, I’d have to make her less realistic.
and in as far as it meshes it makes her seem smug.
Well, I’ve also been accused of being ‘arrogant’ when trying to talk about serious matters, which is fairly close, so I suppose I could have expected that appearance.
even if both were involved in the antics the character less involved and with more leisure
to talk to the audience in that particular scene taking over the narration would probably already help.
I see what you mean—and I’ll certainly take that idea into consideration as I continue thinking about what would work best.
Hunh. I guess it’s true what they say—truth can be stranger than fiction, because fiction has to be plausible. Those parts of the narrator character are fairly closely based on me… so I guess if I want her to seem more believable, I’d have to make her less realistic.
Well, I’ve also been accused of being ‘arrogant’ when trying to talk about serious matters, which is fairly close, so I suppose I could have expected that appearance.
I see what you mean—and I’ll certainly take that idea into consideration as I continue thinking about what would work best.