heh, basically all of the things you note as problems are things that make me actively enjoy the song more! I find the enjambment & mild irregularities & unexpected rhymes clever and fun. agree they add complexity but also that it’s okay for this song to be a bit complex (though I’m somewhat biased towards cooler-and-more-complex things since I’m a choir-type person)
heh, basically all of the things you note as problems are things that make me actively enjoy the song more! I find the enjambment & mild irregularities & unexpected rhymes clever and fun. agree they add complexity but also that it’s okay for this song to be a bit complex (though I’m somewhat biased towards cooler-and-more-complex things since I’m a choir-type person)