It seems to me you can keep all the parts, and all the points, and cut half the paragraphs approximately. The kind of “repetition until everyone gets all subtle nuances of the points” can work well for shorter essays, but many people are not going to wade through all of this.
Brilliant essay, but far too long.
Which parts do you think are not needed?
It seems to me you can keep all the parts, and all the points, and cut half the paragraphs approximately. The kind of “repetition until everyone gets all subtle nuances of the points” can work well for shorter essays, but many people are not going to wade through all of this.