Jack Payne comments on Matthew Khoriaty’s Shortform

[Jack Payne]

Here are a couple of suggestions:

https://​​imgur.com/​​X5yyp9N

https://​​imgur.com/​​kxn99Uj

https://​​imgur.com/​​UCm4n0W

https://​​imgur.com/​​GXQLuOS