Maybe practice editing more? If you suck at it, rewriting /editing your posts will only make you better at it. It might be a bit of work, it might take a bit of time, but it’s nice to take ten minutes of your time to save thirty seconds to a hundred readers (and more importantly to save all the time wasted by comments who misunderstood part of what you said and the ensuing back-and-forth).
(I personally don’t have much time to spend reading long preachy walls of texts telling me about my supposed self-hatred; I didn’t downvote your post but skipped to the discussion because the post itself wasn’t very engaging and seemed to get things wrong fairly quickly)
All of it. Then start over at the other end. Write the thrust of the article in one plain sentence. I don’t know what it is at the moment. Write it in bullet points. Write it in exactly 100 words. Never write a sentence when one word will do; never write one word when none will do. Think only about what truth you are trying to present, and why the reader should agree.
Also, while I don’t want to speculate about your life, it does read like an autobiographical ramble driven by unhappy memories. My personal reaction to it is just, “I don’t care about these people.”
Maybe practice editing more? If you suck at it, rewriting /editing your posts will only make you better at it. It might be a bit of work, it might take a bit of time, but it’s nice to take ten minutes of your time to save thirty seconds to a hundred readers (and more importantly to save all the time wasted by comments who misunderstood part of what you said and the ensuing back-and-forth).
(I personally don’t have much time to spend reading long preachy walls of texts telling me about my supposed self-hatred; I didn’t downvote your post but skipped to the discussion because the post itself wasn’t very engaging and seemed to get things wrong fairly quickly)
I just don’t know what to delete...
All of it. Then start over at the other end. Write the thrust of the article in one plain sentence. I don’t know what it is at the moment. Write it in bullet points. Write it in exactly 100 words. Never write a sentence when one word will do; never write one word when none will do. Think only about what truth you are trying to present, and why the reader should agree.
Also, while I don’t want to speculate about your life, it does read like an autobiographical ramble driven by unhappy memories. My personal reaction to it is just, “I don’t care about these people.”